tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2016505486794178553.post195919261632295384..comments2023-11-03T09:37:18.738-04:00Comments on Deana Barnhart: Agent Pitch Finalist #35 - The DesireeDeanahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17958057331230037880noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2016505486794178553.post-5218642419977735562012-09-27T14:22:19.728-04:002012-09-27T14:22:19.728-04:00I love the ideas of the snowboarder and the vintag...I love the ideas of the snowboarder and the vintage theatre, and your voice is strong. But honestly, this query lost me at the last line about a gateway to another realm of existence. That makes the story--which I thought was contemporary--sound suddenly like it's portal fantasy. If it's fantasy/sci-fi I'd prefer to know the rules of the world from the beginning, or else it feels jarring when they're introduced.<br /><br />But I wish you the best of luck with this!Hannah Bowmanhttp://hannahbowman.tumblr.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2016505486794178553.post-12464817591528519202012-09-24T11:25:37.764-04:002012-09-24T11:25:37.764-04:00Really interesting premise. I'd love to see mo...Really interesting premise. I'd love to see more. Could you lease send a synopsis and the first 3 chapters to me at jordy@corvisieroagency.com? Thanks!!Jordyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16573154547132863157noreply@blogger.com