tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2016505486794178553.post3709221309373197430..comments2023-11-03T09:37:18.738-04:00Comments on Deana Barnhart: 1st Rd Sm Press Contest #26 - Of Fire and ShadowDeanahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17958057331230037880noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2016505486794178553.post-14471988594613900822012-10-03T21:15:12.012-04:002012-10-03T21:15:12.012-04:00I have to say, she makes me think of the smoke mon...I have to say, she makes me think of the smoke monster from Lost. :) But that's okay, it's still an original concept. It's especially interesting that her powers led to her mother's death. Lone Starnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2016505486794178553.post-60059645994299874182012-10-02T00:27:32.956-04:002012-10-02T00:27:32.956-04:00Hey, Entry #26!
I’m going around giving everyone...Hey, Entry #26! <br /><br />I’m going around giving everyone at least one critique and one positive today. (Maybe more, if I spot something helpful.)<br /><br /><b>Positive:</b><br />- Original concept!<br /><br /><b>Critique:</b><br />- Intriguing 150, but Talitha seems a little callous about her mother’s death.<br /><br />Best of luck! :)Honey Badgernoreply@blogger.com