tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2016505486794178553.post2838473414060996812..comments2023-11-03T09:37:18.738-04:00Comments on Deana Barnhart: 1st Rd Sm Press Contest #36 - A City in the AirDeanahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17958057331230037880noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2016505486794178553.post-55096180521372046722012-10-03T22:20:56.276-04:002012-10-03T22:20:56.276-04:00I can't help but wonder why she is using the c...I can't help but wonder why she is using the cockoo clock if she hates it so much she wants to rupture her ear drums. Can't she just turn it off? ;) Good voice though.Lone Starnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2016505486794178553.post-57924491909623147682012-10-02T02:19:44.278-04:002012-10-02T02:19:44.278-04:00Hey, Entry #36!
I’m going around giving everyone...Hey, Entry #36! <br /><br />I’m going around giving everyone at least one critique and one positive today. (Maybe more, if I spot something helpful.)<br /><br /><b>Positive:</b><br />- Great voice & standout genre.<br /><br /><b>Critique:</b><br />- Try to be a little more specific about their next course of action. Are they after the other two boxes or just the head moderator? What can he/she do about any of this?<br /><br />Best of luck! :)Honey Badgernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2016505486794178553.post-30060547843858891412012-10-01T23:02:55.626-04:002012-10-01T23:02:55.626-04:00Hooray! I love this story. Good luck!!Hooray! I love this story. Good luck!!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2016505486794178553.post-13241416277678931852012-10-01T11:00:11.518-04:002012-10-01T11:00:11.518-04:00Ooh I really love your query letter! And it leads ...Ooh I really love your query letter! And it leads perfectly into your first 150 words! Great job and good luck!Jesshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02000569858548717605noreply@blogger.com