tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2016505486794178553.post3132119113457681747..comments2023-11-03T09:37:18.738-04:00Comments on Deana Barnhart: Rd 1 Agent Pitch Contest #22 - CIVILDeanahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17958057331230037880noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2016505486794178553.post-44791548178913588782013-03-02T05:36:10.954-05:002013-03-02T05:36:10.954-05:00Tap -tap, with the whip or thump-thump with the le...Tap -tap, with the whip or thump-thump with the leg. When a sugar solution is measured by refractometer or densitometer Nebraska at USC: Simply the biggest game of the early Bill Callahan era, a barometer on whether Nebraska really can shuck the option era and succeed with 21st century aerial concepts.Olsonhttp://www.ambassadorlimotampa.com/blog/post/2012/05/02/Alan-Berg-Seminar-March-15-2012.aspxnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2016505486794178553.post-5386540363831704942012-09-19T10:01:20.113-04:002012-09-19T10:01:20.113-04:00I love this. Your query improved considerably and ...I love this. Your query improved considerably and the first page is a real grabber.Katharina Gerlachhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00223722392075669331noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2016505486794178553.post-75677099359681467532012-09-18T15:22:46.592-04:002012-09-18T15:22:46.592-04:00(Hi again! I plan to give out comments during this...(Hi again! I plan to give out comments during this round, and then I'll give out my top ten votes as soon as I have critiqued everyone's queries.)<br /><br />What a great concept! I love stories where many complicated characters are thrown in together, and I also like the idea that this novel will teach children history while simultaneously entertaining them.<br /><br />Great job!SugarMagnolianoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2016505486794178553.post-35777745421439569402012-09-18T12:13:59.947-04:002012-09-18T12:13:59.947-04:00Hear that? It's the sound of me swooning. I lo...Hear that? It's the sound of me swooning. I love how your query touches on the characters' disparate struggles. It makes me want to see how they all work together.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2016505486794178553.post-44993385062262103012012-09-17T18:21:10.671-04:002012-09-17T18:21:10.671-04:00The first paragraph of the query gives us a great ...The first paragraph of the query gives us a great picture of who each character is. And with 5 MC's that can be hard. The premise is fun, and sounds like something I'd love to read to my kids. The first 150 is what completely hooked me. I didn't want it to end. Although I kinda want to know the characters name instead of just calling her the girl.<br /><br />You have my vote!The Roosternoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2016505486794178553.post-57289471100050740072012-09-17T12:11:33.428-04:002012-09-17T12:11:33.428-04:00Thanks for participating! My plan is to read throu...Thanks for participating! My plan is to read through all the entries and then begin my comments and critiques. I will give out my top ten my votes when I'm finished.<br /><br />Best of luck to you, and stay tuned!SugarMagnolianoreply@blogger.com