tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2016505486794178553.post5219185586616786972..comments2023-11-03T09:37:18.738-04:00Comments on Deana Barnhart: Agent Pitch Finalist #50 - The Lost SpitfireDeanahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17958057331230037880noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2016505486794178553.post-88489473513064483672012-09-27T15:51:20.547-04:002012-09-27T15:51:20.547-04:00I liked this premise, but the voice sounded almost...I liked this premise, but the voice sounded almost middle grade towards the end of the query. Though Jimmy is in that age group, for an adult novel there didn't appear to be much depth in the plot. There's an adventure and a villain, but what else?Sara D'Emicnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2016505486794178553.post-65046203984628041842012-09-27T14:43:57.612-04:002012-09-27T14:43:57.612-04:00I'll be honest -- I think this is a great conc...I'll be honest -- I think this is a great concept, but I found the query a little too dry. Clearly there's a lot of great historical detail and plot here, but I found myself wanting more of a character's voice to hang on to and draw me into the story.<br />Hannah Bowmanhttp://hannahbowman.tumblr.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2016505486794178553.post-9476212085131165962012-09-26T10:47:46.646-04:002012-09-26T10:47:46.646-04:00Very exciting opening line.Very exciting opening line.Linda Glazhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04374683352435771715noreply@blogger.com