tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2016505486794178553.post8789675673258290346..comments2023-11-03T09:37:18.738-04:00Comments on Deana Barnhart: 1st Rd Sm Press Contest #16 - Against the Falling MoonDeanahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17958057331230037880noreply@blogger.comBlogger14125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2016505486794178553.post-17899223567152325962012-10-04T02:17:59.606-04:002012-10-04T02:17:59.606-04:00Oh my gosh! Thank you SO much! Oh my gosh! Thank you SO much! Tamarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04070551912944266954noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2016505486794178553.post-83155243720529005872012-10-03T22:35:24.575-04:002012-10-03T22:35:24.575-04:00I'm back. You've got my vote!I'm back. You've got my vote!Lone Starnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2016505486794178553.post-2772895298065528492012-10-03T18:46:18.433-04:002012-10-03T18:46:18.433-04:00Thank you so much for the vote escape artist!
Tha...Thank you so much for the vote escape artist!<br /><br />Thank you for the very kind comments lone star. :)Tamarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04070551912944266954noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2016505486794178553.post-79152862769664593282012-10-03T17:15:13.040-04:002012-10-03T17:15:13.040-04:00That's a wonderful query! Complicated concepts...That's a wonderful query! Complicated concepts, but you conveyed them clearly. You also clearly defined the MC's choice at the end. The first 150 was solid.Lone Starnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2016505486794178553.post-62167557095532555492012-10-03T12:30:51.249-04:002012-10-03T12:30:51.249-04:00You have my vote. Good luck!You have my vote. Good luck!Escape Artistnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2016505486794178553.post-65107284790377886332012-10-02T12:29:44.491-04:002012-10-02T12:29:44.491-04:00Thank you so much Honey Badger!
And thanks Talyn...Thank you so much Honey Badger! <br /><br />And thanks Talynn! I'll swing by to see yours. :)Tamarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04070551912944266954noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2016505486794178553.post-86769546862261934082012-10-02T10:05:11.732-04:002012-10-02T10:05:11.732-04:00I really liked this one the first time I saw. Now,...I really liked this one the first time I saw. Now, I like it even more! This grabbed my attention from the beginning and wouldn't let go. I can picture the first 150 just a like a movie playing on the page. <br /><br />I love it. Ink in the Bookhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03117718811407968345noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2016505486794178553.post-5477555061040927462012-10-02T02:26:36.165-04:002012-10-02T02:26:36.165-04:00It might be easier than you think. That's why ...It might be easier than you think. That's why I'm back. ;)<br /><br /><b>You have my vote!</b>Honey Badgernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2016505486794178553.post-20282458018181131222012-10-02T00:53:56.249-04:002012-10-02T00:53:56.249-04:00Thank you so much, Mara!! Now all I have to do is ...Thank you so much, Mara!! Now all I have to do is get some judges to agree. :)Tamarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04070551912944266954noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2016505486794178553.post-58178658915589880612012-10-01T23:39:08.830-04:002012-10-01T23:39:08.830-04:00As if the stakes weren't already high enough w...As if the stakes weren't already high enough with him risking banishment to get to Auri (Who doesn't remember him!!), you throw the family in there too! WOW! I would read this in a heartbeat. Amazing query that hooks me not once but twice and then a solid 150 words to back it up. You've clearly got the story and the talent to tell it! I hope you move on to the next round!Mara Valderranhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04718957990733048214noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2016505486794178553.post-67011165543783809032012-10-01T23:08:28.600-04:002012-10-01T23:08:28.600-04:00Thank you Honey Badger!! And Mystery Science Theat...Thank you Honey Badger!! And Mystery Science Theater geek. I was super excited to read your comments. <br /><br />And thanks, Heather! I left a comment for you on yours. :)Tamarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04070551912944266954noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2016505486794178553.post-25516811446974663852012-10-01T21:30:23.780-04:002012-10-01T21:30:23.780-04:00Hey, Entry #16!
I’m going around giving everyone...Hey, Entry #16! <br /><br />I’m going around giving everyone at least one critique and one positive today. (Maybe more, if I spot something helpful.)<br /><br /><b>Positive:</b><br />- I’m digging this entry! I have a feeling I’ll be back. :)<br /><br /><b>Critique:</b><br />- I'm drawing a blank here. First time tonight!<br /><br />Best of luck! :)Honey Badgernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2016505486794178553.post-45555097316688145202012-10-01T20:10:18.016-04:002012-10-01T20:10:18.016-04:00Love the changes you've made to the first 150!...Love the changes you've made to the first 150! Just as much voice as the first one. <br /><br />I also think your query has changed since I last read it. This new version has really upped the stakes - LOVE it!Heather M Bryanthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17991599364208766781noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2016505486794178553.post-30909498723982559002012-10-01T18:35:38.278-04:002012-10-01T18:35:38.278-04:00I'm not a fantasy fan, but you've absolute...I'm not a fantasy fan, but you've absolutely done a beautiful job of creating a query that makes me *want* to read your story. And the first 150 words? Clean, tight and well done.<br /><br />You've got my vote.Mystery Science Theater Geeknoreply@blogger.com