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Wednesday, July 13, 2011

Story Chain

For the Gearin' Up to Get an Agent blogfest, week two is all about creation and the story chain.  There is still time to sign up for week three (query contest) and week four (agent pitch contest)

If you'd like to follow the story chain for wk 2 here go the list is here and I will be posting the final version on Friday.

Marcie's part

"Yes," every thing's in order," Tony sighed.  He looked toward me with that, 'I'm so sorry' expression.

"What? Why are you looking at me like that?"

A cough garbled up what Tony said next, but Dio heard.  "Your parents, they drowned on their vacation in Istanbul.  I'm so sorry to have to tell you like this.  I have been working very hard to get you in a good home, and Sandy, well, she is like a second mother to you."

Dio glanced through tear stained eyes toward Sandy.  "Is this true?"

"I'm sorry Butterscotch, but it is."

Suddenly Dio hated that nickname.  It stung her like slap to the face, but what she hated more were the next words that came out of Sandy's mouth.  "Tony has brought your bag.  You're going to Europe with me."
Juliana's part
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25 comments:

  1. marcie_annJuly 13, 2011 at 9:02 AM

    Nice, Deana! You know what's funny? I was thinking that Tony and Dio would be adopting the baby... but you took it another direction. LOVE IT! This is SO MUCH FUN!!!

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  2. UnknownJuly 13, 2011 at 9:04 AM

    Now that's a huge emotional twist! And Dio's headed to Europe. Yay!

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  3. AnonymousJuly 13, 2011 at 9:14 AM

    And a totally unexpected twist! You've got me wondering -- what's so awful about going to Europe?

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  4. AnonymousJuly 13, 2011 at 9:17 AM

    FYI: The link for Juliana goes back to Marcie's page.

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  5. DeanaJuly 13, 2011 at 9:29 AM

    Thanks Callie, I changed the link. Whew, that was crazy to be creative like that one the fly! So fun!!!

    Hmm, what bad could be in Europe??? The question of the day:)

    So I chose to be suprised and not read the others so did I throw it way off balance? I'm off to read it now....

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  6. Angela CothranJuly 13, 2011 at 11:06 AM

    Wow, you blindsided me! I love that in a story.

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  7. Alleged AuthorJuly 13, 2011 at 11:10 AM

    Man, this girl's life sucks!

    1. Crappy name (according to her)
    2. Dead parents
    3. Has to go to Europe (kind of cool to us but sucky to a kid)

    Whoa. :P Can't wait to read what the next author does with this. Nice!

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  8. Loralie HallJuly 13, 2011 at 12:34 PM

    Wow - kapow! Amazing and intriguing twist. So much gut-wrenching in just a few short sentences

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  9. Christina MercerJuly 13, 2011 at 12:44 PM

    Wow, you are the queen twister :-)) Did not see that coming!

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  10. DeanaJuly 13, 2011 at 1:01 PM

    Just wait till you all read further:)

    Queen Twister...I like it:)

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  11. AnonymousJuly 13, 2011 at 2:08 PM

    Awesome, I had no idea what you'd do with the baby, this is wicked!

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  12. Andrea MackJuly 13, 2011 at 4:45 PM

    This is so much fun...going off to read the next parts!

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  13. lindyJuly 13, 2011 at 4:49 PM

    I stopped by earlier to read your post, but was way too stressed to leave a comment. Now that things have settled down around here, I'm back. I really like the way you used butterscotch as a nickname and the added drama of her parents tragic drownings!

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  14. UnknownJuly 13, 2011 at 6:27 PM

    LOL you just changed the whole story! Ha ha Queen Twister for sure :)

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  15. UnknownJuly 13, 2011 at 6:33 PM

    Been hunting for this change to first person...lol, but of cource! You did it...ha ha ha. I like writing in first person better so thank you!

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  16. DeanaJuly 13, 2011 at 7:59 PM

    Whoops, Siv, thanks for the catch. I changed it back to third. My current wip is in first so I guess some habits are hard to break:)

    Thanks for all the sweeeeet comments guys. My twist seems to be the first of MANY! How cool is this story gonna get?:)

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  17. UnknownJuly 13, 2011 at 8:12 PM

    Love that you gave Dio some emotional depth here, and fed us a great new plot twist. It just took this story places I hadn't dreamed of.

    And Butterscotch! Ewww. Good grief--no wonder Sandy and Tony turned into baddies :)

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  18. DeanaJuly 13, 2011 at 10:26 PM

    Lora - LOL I woke up late and literally had 5 min to pull this together. Butterscotch nickname was toally on the fly...hehe

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  19. Kristi's Book NookJuly 14, 2011 at 7:32 AM

    I like the teen anxiety.

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  20. amberJuly 14, 2011 at 9:25 AM

    way to drop that bomb! :) 'uhhhh your parents are dead and you're going on a european vacay!' It's slightly absurd -- but it totally works.

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  21. StephanieJuly 14, 2011 at 9:54 AM

    I was thinking Tony would adopt the baby as well, so this was a great twist to the twist :-)

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  22. DeanaJuly 14, 2011 at 10:56 AM

    Amber- Ha! Slightly absurd...ya think:) That's how I write with five minutes. Just rip it all apart:)

    Stephanie- I actually feel kinda bad I missed the ball on the baby. I didn't read any but Marcie's right before me so I was totally guessing my way through it all.

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  23. AnonymousJuly 14, 2011 at 12:40 PM

    I love the nickname Buttercup. So funny and cute!

    Where to we sign up for week 3? Thanks again for setting this all up. It's been a blast!

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  24. Arlee BirdJuly 14, 2011 at 2:25 PM

    This seems like quite an ambitious project.


    Lee
    Tossing It Out

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  25. Leslie S. RoseJuly 15, 2011 at 1:08 AM

    This is a kick to read. You go girl.

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