Wednesday, July 13, 2011

Story Chain

For the Gearin' Up to Get an Agent blogfest, week two is all about creation and the story chain.  There is still time to sign up for week three (query contest) and week four (agent pitch contest)

If you'd like to follow the story chain for wk 2 here go the list is here and I will be posting the final version on Friday.

Marcie's part

"Yes," every thing's in order," Tony sighed.  He looked toward me with that, 'I'm so sorry' expression.

"What? Why are you looking at me like that?"

A cough garbled up what Tony said next, but Dio heard.  "Your parents, they drowned on their vacation in Istanbul.  I'm so sorry to have to tell you like this.  I have been working very hard to get you in a good home, and Sandy, well, she is like a second mother to you."

Dio glanced through tear stained eyes toward Sandy.  "Is this true?"

"I'm sorry Butterscotch, but it is."

Suddenly Dio hated that nickname.  It stung her like slap to the face, but what she hated more were the next words that came out of Sandy's mouth.  "Tony has brought your bag.  You're going to Europe with me."
Juliana's part

25 comments:

marcie_ann said...

Nice, Deana! You know what's funny? I was thinking that Tony and Dio would be adopting the baby... but you took it another direction. LOVE IT! This is SO MUCH FUN!!!

Angelina C. Hansen said...

Now that's a huge emotional twist! And Dio's headed to Europe. Yay!

Callie Kingston said...

And a totally unexpected twist! You've got me wondering -- what's so awful about going to Europe?

Callie Kingston said...

FYI: The link for Juliana goes back to Marcie's page.

Deana said...

Thanks Callie, I changed the link. Whew, that was crazy to be creative like that one the fly! So fun!!!

Hmm, what bad could be in Europe??? The question of the day:)

So I chose to be suprised and not read the others so did I throw it way off balance? I'm off to read it now....

Angie Cothran said...

Wow, you blindsided me! I love that in a story.

Alleged Author said...

Man, this girl's life sucks!

1. Crappy name (according to her)
2. Dead parents
3. Has to go to Europe (kind of cool to us but sucky to a kid)

Whoa. :P Can't wait to read what the next author does with this. Nice!

Loralie Hall said...

Wow - kapow! Amazing and intriguing twist. So much gut-wrenching in just a few short sentences

Christina Mercer said...

Wow, you are the queen twister :-)) Did not see that coming!

Deana said...

Just wait till you all read further:)

Queen Twister...I like it:)

catherinemjohnson said...

Awesome, I had no idea what you'd do with the baby, this is wicked!

Andrea Mack said...

This is so much fun...going off to read the next parts!

lindy said...

I stopped by earlier to read your post, but was way too stressed to leave a comment. Now that things have settled down around here, I'm back. I really like the way you used butterscotch as a nickname and the added drama of her parents tragic drownings!

Siv Maria said...

LOL you just changed the whole story! Ha ha Queen Twister for sure :)

Siv Maria said...

Been hunting for this change to first person...lol, but of cource! You did it...ha ha ha. I like writing in first person better so thank you!

Deana said...

Whoops, Siv, thanks for the catch. I changed it back to third. My current wip is in first so I guess some habits are hard to break:)

Thanks for all the sweeeeet comments guys. My twist seems to be the first of MANY! How cool is this story gonna get?:)

Lora R. Rivera said...

Love that you gave Dio some emotional depth here, and fed us a great new plot twist. It just took this story places I hadn't dreamed of.

And Butterscotch! Ewww. Good grief--no wonder Sandy and Tony turned into baddies :)

Deana said...

Lora - LOL I woke up late and literally had 5 min to pull this together. Butterscotch nickname was toally on the fly...hehe

Kristi Bernard said...

I like the teen anxiety.

amber said...

way to drop that bomb! :) 'uhhhh your parents are dead and you're going on a european vacay!' It's slightly absurd -- but it totally works.

Stephanie said...

I was thinking Tony would adopt the baby as well, so this was a great twist to the twist :-)

Deana said...

Amber- Ha! Slightly absurd...ya think:) That's how I write with five minutes. Just rip it all apart:)

Stephanie- I actually feel kinda bad I missed the ball on the baby. I didn't read any but Marcie's right before me so I was totally guessing my way through it all.

kpsimmon said...

I love the nickname Buttercup. So funny and cute!

Where to we sign up for week 3? Thanks again for setting this all up. It's been a blast!

Arlee Bird said...

This seems like quite an ambitious project.


Lee
Tossing It Out

Leslie Rose said...

This is a kick to read. You go girl.