Monday, October 8, 2012

Small Press Finalist #19 - The Princess Paradox

THE PRINCESS PARADOX
Lighthearted Women's Fiction
90,000 words

Query:

Jaded by fairy tales, twenty-five-year-old Nora Roseberry has written off the probability that Prince Charming will come rescue her. Which is great. She's not interested in being saved. But fate is about to step in, offering this "damsel in distress" a shot at happy-ever-after.

When Nora takes her love life into her own hands by placing a want-ad in the local newspaper, she's shocked (but a teensy bit flattered) when roguish neighbor Aidan O'Neill comes-a-courtin'. Aidan's not the kind of prince who needs relationship help--evidenced by the sheer volume of maidens that cross his threshold. Besides, he doesn't go for women like her. He dates knockouts. Uncomfortable with his flirting and confused by her own foolish desire, Nora's almost relieved when Aidan reveals he answered the ad for his equally handsome brother Finn.

She quickly finds out Finn is everything fairy tales promised and more. Romantic, sincere, and ready to commit, he soon proposes--just when Aidan seems to have decided to change his ways and pursue Nora himself. Talk about crappy timing. Nora's the blissful princess being carried away by her handsome hero. With a wedding looming, a caustic-mother-to-be waiting to rip her to shreds, and a night with Aidan sprinkled with moonlight and magic, she needs to make a choice. And it will risk everything she's worked so hard to make fairy tale perfect.

First 150:

I wish I had the guts to tell my best friend I'd rather gouge out my eyes with a cocktail weenie than attend her wedding. Weddings, by nature, raise numerous questions if you’re single. People you don’t even know approach you as if it’s open season on any insensitive question they can muster. Aren't you involved? Did you just break up with someone? Are you a lesbian?

My answer to all of these is an emphatic "no." But explaining my feelings to Jillian, well, that just makes her more eager to hook me up with someone. Which is why I'm sitting here in dressing room I-lost-count, watching her zip up another beautiful Marchesa bridal gown, dreading this whole experience. I know exactly how today will end.

"Ohmigod, Nora. Look at me."

"You look…" I nodded, "breathtaking. Really."

"I do, don’t I?" she tittered.

"You do."

3 comments:

Amy Lichtenhan said...

Great first 150! I'd love to read more.

Please send query and first three chapters to submissions@sapphirestarpublishing.com

Krystal Wade said...

I absolutely love the first 150 of this story. We don't publish straight Women's Fiction, but this makes me wish we did! Good luck to you out there. (My only suggestion is lose dialogue tags such as tittered.)

abuckley23 said...

As Krystal mentioned we don't handle Women's Fiction but I do like the premise. REALLY liked the first paragraph of your query!